This is my story writing about a lighthouse that breaks down and creates a problem for the villagers on the clifftops.
'The moon looked like a crushed cookie in the dark sky. Then waves looked black so that you couldn't see people under the black waves. The boat was about to crash in to the pointy cliffs.'
Wednesday, June 13, 2018
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Hi Oliver, i like how you add details something you need to work on is make some more sentences and it reminds me of the titanic.
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ReplyDeleteOliver Great discription of the moon
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